I’m thinking that I might need to change the title of this short story? Well I don’t absolutely need to, but it might be a good idea. Firstly because I’m changing about half the story so a more suitable title might come out of that, and secondly the title, although quite appropriate, is slightly odd?
On the other hand is there much point worrying about it too much? At least the title stands out. I imagine that most editors will be more concerned about the content of the story than the title.